You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event Write a letter of application to the organisers In your letterL Explain why you are interest in helping Give details suitable past experience Suggest ways you might help

Essay topics:

You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event.

Write a letter of application to the organisers. In your letterL

Explain why you are interest in helping

Give details suitable past experience

Suggest ways you might help with the event

Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away.

Dear Sir or Madam

I am writing this letter with regard to take part in your charity event in next month.

Since I was a child , I have been extremely passionate about helping people around me. Whenever I saw a kid hurt himself around me, I always be the first one run toward him and provide assistance. Helping other people always give me the most satisfaction.

I still remember that when I was attending middle school, I spent most of my time provide household services for single elderly people during summer vacation. By helping those people with their daily living matters, it helped me realize how many people were suffering from difficulties in life and how lucky we are to have a normal life.

Since I have a art design back ground, I can help you design various patterns of pamphlet and distribute them around the neighbour. I always believe that charity always have the lowest attention in the society and we need to in crease the awareness of people that how many people are in need among us.

I look forward hearing from you.

JunLiang Guo

Votes
Average: 9.3 (4 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ent in next month. Since I was a child , I have been extremely passionate about ...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
Suggestion: be always
...r I saw a kid hurt himself around me, I always be the first one run toward him and provid...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 14, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...o have a normal life. Since I have a art design back ground, I can help you ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, still, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 892.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77005347594 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41240264254 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.663101604278 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.2988029334 44.8134815571 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1111111111 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 4.34317383033 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140231365771 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561469756376 0.0766984524023 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376280030215 0.0603063233224 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0864545946939 0.12726935374 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225634115065 0.0580467560999 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 8.37731958763 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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