You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the

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You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff.

Write a letter to the Registrar, complaining about the service you received.

You should write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to complain about the irresponsible behaviour of the staff in your hospital Amity Hospital.

On 25th of September my daughter complained about stomach pain at around 2:30 am. I took her to the hospital to get her examined by the doctor. The staff present were not friendly and they were not ready to listed to my problem. Moreover, they were busy in gossips and watching televisions. We had to wait for 4 hours before my daughter was treated by the doctor and meanwhile my daughter had to suffer the excruciating pain for 4 hours.

I am very disappointed with your staff and their cruel nature towards me and my daughter. This type of staff should not be appointed.

I would request you to appoint employees who are more responsible and sensible. Moreover, they perform their duties and tasks effectively and efficiently.

I hope you will take my suggestions into consideration and will impose necessary actions.

Yours faithfully,

Prabhpreet Kaur

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 100, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 839.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 166.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05421686747 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87495227071 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644578313253 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2820078595 44.8134815571 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9166666667 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8333333333 16.8248392259 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.25 4.34317383033 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25199973592 0.216113520407 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732891199932 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583403140313 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100020287956 0.12726935374 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542980789705 0.0580467560999 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 8.71597938144 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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