You wish to apply for a new college course, but you are unsure about the details of cost, duration and subjects posted on the college website. Write an email to the relevant person in admissions at the college, asking them to clarify these points for you. In this email,
Say what your interest is
Explain why the website is unclear
Request the information that you need
Begin your letter ‘Dear --------’
Do not write any addresses
Write at least 150 words
Dear Mr Smith,
I am writing in association with the new photography course which is going to be held at faculty of fine arts. Since I have always wanted to foster my photography skills, I find this course a great opportunity to take in some technical techniques. However, further information about the course was rather ambiguous, and I’d appreciate if you could give me some more precise details.
Firstly, regarding the cost of the course, I wonder if the fee of $99 is for each skill or all three skills because it has been posted on the website that the photography course includes three different skills. Apart from that, whether the fee is payable in monthly installments or it needs to be paid fully in advance.
Secondly, it hasn’t been cleared up the exact length of the course, as well as the start date. Your website says Summer to Autumn, but I can’t see any specific dates related to this. Lastly, I would be really grateful if you could give me some extra information about the course content itself, including required equipment and books, and if they are provided by the faculty or they should be bought by applicants themselves.
Thank you for your help, and I look forward to receiving the requested information
Kind regards,
Javad Karimi
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... is for each skill or all three skills? Since it has been posted on the website that ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r it needs to be paid fully in advance. Secondly, it hasn’t been cleared up the ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 421, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uld be bought by applicants themselves. Thank you for your help, and I look forw...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1060.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 217.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88479262673 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63878709821 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658986175115 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 290.88556701 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.1048625481 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 76.5299724578 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 16.8248392259 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7 4.34317383033 269% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154095940872 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542982468596 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038865486927 0.0603063233224 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0965894988518 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278784677252 0.0580467560999 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... is for each skill or all three skills? Since it has been posted on the website that ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r it needs to be paid fully in advance. Secondly, it hasn’t been cleared up the ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 421, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uld be bought by applicants themselves. Thank you for your help, and I look forw...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1060.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 217.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88479262673 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63878709821 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658986175115 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 290.88556701 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.1048625481 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 76.5299724578 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 16.8248392259 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7 4.34317383033 269% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154095940872 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542982468596 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038865486927 0.0603063233224 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0965894988518 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278784677252 0.0580467560999 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.