You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.write a letter to your manager. In your letter:- explain why you want to work in company's head office for six months.- say how work co

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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.
write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
- explain why you want to work in company's head office for six months.
- say how work could be done while you are away.
- ask for his/her help in arranging it.

Dear Mr. James,

I am writing to share my career aspiration to work in the headquarter of the company, located in the San Jose, United States.

I am keen to acquire in-depth knowledge of the hardware architecture of the network devices manufactured by the company. As the hardware lab of the company is located in the San Jose, therefore, It is not feasible here to learn thoroughly by accessing lab equipment remotely. Therefore, I wish to visit lab in person to gain clear understanding and hands on hardware devices. By trained there for sufficient period of six months will certainly be an exposure to great learning.

Though, time zones would be different but I assure you that my assignments will be completed on stipulated time frame by working remotely. Moreover, I will share my findings with team on weekly basis by scheduling remote sessions.

This exposure will certainly enhance my technical skills. I will be highly thankful to you If you would consent on this and consider my candidature to arrange a short business visit to shape my career in right direction.

Yours sincerely,
Ell Green

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...o share my career aspiration to work in the headquarter of the company, located in the San Jose...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 935.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 186.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02688172043 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88809778205 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618279569892 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1534931689 44.8134815571 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 4.34317383033 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132226259022 0.216113520407 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478462609048 0.0766984524023 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437231031114 0.0603063233224 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0729037538897 0.12726935374 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0153379310526 0.0580467560999 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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