You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country write a letter to your manager In your letter explain why you want to work in company s head office for six months say how work co

Dear Mr James,

My name is Arjun and I am writing this letter to show my interest for 6 month secondment in our Head Office Dubai.

As an Senior Manager in the organisation, I hope you can understand how quintessential it is to work in Company's head office for one's brilliant career. Further, for current project, I need to work in Tandem with headquarters creative team, Therefore, it's my sincere request to you for permitting to have this life time opportunity before it's too late. I am quite positive that this window will help me to enhance my skills and act's as stepping stone for my future endeavours.

Fortunately my colleagues and team members are very happy about this and extended their full support, if any required, by co ordinating with me by emails. Moreover, since majority decisions are taken by main branch, my presence there will help our office members to get necessary approvals. Nevertheless, I keep in touch with area supervisor to take continuous update and see no hinderance is caused to our mission. In addition, I requested our team mates Johnes and Rajesh for taking care of my work while I work temporarily in our Corporate office.

After giving my assurance, I seek your solicitation in sending letter to Human Resources department for recommending me to the recent temporary vacancy in Dubai. If it's not too much to ask, Kindly assist me in preparing objective statement showing my interest to join the Head office. I shall be grateful if you can provide me with contact details of recruitment officer so that I can approach them after your assent.

Thank you in advance for giving me this opportunity and look forward for your response.

Yours Sincerely,

Arjun.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 79, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'secondment' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'secondments'.
Suggestion: secondments
... letter to show my interest for 6 month secondment in our Head Office Dubai. As an Sen...
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Line 5, column 4, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ndment in our Head Office Dubai. As an Senior Manager in the organisation, I h...
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Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... headquarters creative team, Therefore, its my sincere request to you for permittin...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...uest to you for permitting to have this life time opportunity before its too late. I am q...
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Line 7, column 372, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...supervisor to take continuous update and see no hinderance is caused to our missi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 32.9175257732 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.85567010309 311% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1438.0 937.175257732 153% => OK
No of words: 289.0 206.0 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97577854671 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83414450784 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 127.690721649 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615916955017 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 290.88556701 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.8139241775 44.8134815571 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.615384615 76.5299724578 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 4.34317383033 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285708195993 0.216113520407 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102860804865 0.0766984524023 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870041094261 0.0603063233224 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162855687489 0.12726935374 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587773108908 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 8.37731958763 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 7.59969072165 124% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 41.2886597938 208% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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