You would like to spend six months working in head office Write a letter to your manager In your letter explain why you want to work in the company s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his her help in arr

Essay topics:

You would like to spend six months working in head office
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:

explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months
say how your work could be done while you are away
ask for his/her help in arranging it
Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ..................,

Dear Mr. Wang,
I am writing you to express my interest to work at our company’s headquarters in Germany for a short period of at least half a year.
As I have been working in Singapore for the last 10 years, I am quite well versed with the local process and procedure of our trading business. However, when it comes to handling shipments destined to Europe, I still struggle with the documentation. Working at the headquarters would definitely improve my knowledge of our business and bring more efficiency in my day to day work.
As we are also running low on staff in our office, I have discussed with my counterpart Mr. Smith in the head office who is willing to come and work at my position for six months in Singapore.
May I request you to discuss this topic with upper management at the next leadership team’s meeting to seek further approval from departments like Finance and HR.
Awaiting a positive response.

Yours sincerely,
John Doe

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Wang, I am writing you to express my interest ...
^^^
Line 8, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a positive response. Yours sincerely, John Doe
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, may, so, still, well, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 796.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76646706587 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80455671797 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.676646706587 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 240.3 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.8109529492 44.8134815571 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 16.8248392259 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 4.34317383033 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221074046629 0.216113520407 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808510436729 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562415981766 0.0603063233224 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981906261937 0.12726935374 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608575518037 0.0580467560999 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.