Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to your friend inviting him to join.In your letter: • explain about the trip. • explain why your brother couldn't make it. • giving details about the trip.

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Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to your friend inviting him to join.

In your letter:
• explain about the trip.
• explain why your brother couldn't make it.
• giving details about the trip.

Dear Max,

Hope you and your family are all well. Thanks for your letter and the birthday card, it was quite a surprise for me. Anyways, the reason I am writing to you is that I want you to join me on a trip to the Gold Coast and Sydney.

My brother and I have planned this 7 days road trip for celebrating Christmas and New Year. I always wished for a road trip and finally it is happening. Shopping, surfing, local sightseeing and partying is the theme for this trip. Fun at the Gold Coast beaches, meeting old friends and fireworks in Sydney is on the cards.

Unfortunately, my brother won’t be able to join us as his wife’s delivery date is approaching and he doesn’t want to take any risk.

To begin with the details, we will start our journey by car on December 24th. Firstly, we will travel to the Gold Coast where we will meet our high school friends, Nick and Josh. They are throwing a party on Christmas night in the club Deval. Then, on 26th and 27th do the local sightseeing, enjoying the beach and surfing. On 28th we move to my cousin’s place in Sydney. We will do some shopping and enjoy the engagement ceremony of my cousin on 30th. Then, on December 31st will go to the Sydney Opera House and enjoy the late night fireworks. Finally, on January 1st we will head back to Melbourne.

I hope you like the idea of this trip. Please write to me soon so that I can confirm the itinerary to others.

Best regards,
John

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t was quite a surprise for me. Anyways, the reason I am writing to you is that I...
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Line 9, column 402, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ill be staying at my aunt's house. On 29th will do some shopping and be a par...
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Line 9, column 495, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...gagement ceremony of my cousin on 30th. On December 31st will enjoy the fireworks ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, finally, first, firstly, if, so, well, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 5.05154639175 317% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1209.0 937.175257732 129% => OK
No of words: 277.0 206.0 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36462093863 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42779716291 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 127.690721649 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56678700361 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 347.4 290.88556701 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5679285775 44.8134815571 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.1666666667 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3888888889 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 4.34317383033 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 7.41237113402 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187604490148 0.216113520407 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572696428404 0.0766984524023 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627608966738 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125213036053 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844708891401 0.0580467560999 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 8.37731958763 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.71 8.71597938144 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.32 7.59969072165 83% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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