Your child is going on a three-day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
-say why you would like to go on the trip.
-suggest what you could do to help during the trip.
-ask details about the trip.
Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Start with:
Dear Mr ________ ,
Dear Mr. White,
I am writing this letter to show an interest in volunteering for the three-day international school trip to India and I hope you will find this letter to the best of your knowledge in considering me to go with school children.
Since I was born in India and lived twenty-seven years of my life, I would be best the candidate to go as guardian on this international trip. Apart from that, I want my children to see the place where I came from and what kind of hard work it took to migrate to another country. I hope you will grant my wish to go along with my children as well as schoolchildren on this three-day trip.
Besides, I would be able to help schoolchildren in different ways such as showing the culture and its beautiful colors of India in the capital city which is New Delhi. I ensure that every child should learn about the history of my country and its traditional values. Also, I will take to the mouthwatering restaurants of our Indian food in itself the capital and other states which will be planned in the entire international school trip. Finally, I will prepare some of the activities for children as well as for the parents who will be joining in this trip.
If you will consider my request to come along with schoolchildren, I would request you to please share the details of the trip which includes the accommodation details, departure flight details, and charges of adults and children on this entire trip.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Shwatank Bhasin
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. White, I am writing this letter t...
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Line 7, column 464, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...al school trip. Finally, I will prepare some of the activities for children as well as for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, if, look, so, well, apart from, as for, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 26.3917525773 163% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1277.0 937.175257732 136% => OK
No of words: 273.0 206.0 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67765567766 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78167446633 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.622605031667 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 378.0 290.88556701 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.2378633823 44.8134815571 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.090909091 76.5299724578 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8181818182 16.8248392259 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 4.34317383033 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265286118378 0.216113520407 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964884580986 0.0766984524023 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782519070905 0.0603063233224 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149051284883 0.12726935374 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912129746571 0.0580467560999 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 8.37731958763 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 8.62886597938 214% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.