Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:•Say why you would like to go on the trip•Sugges

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to take your permission to join for the school trip to a foreign country. Actually, I am father of Tichu, who is a student of X standard in your school. She never had any trip outside of the city and it is her first time when she will be going out for a week. I am a bit worried about her, due to her shy nature so I am seeking for your permission to accompany on the trip.

I can take care of in all possible manner and let her have feel alone or isolated. Moreover, I have good knowledge of English and French so I can help you in managing the various activities on a foreign land such as guiding students, explanation of objects etc.

Also, I would like to have the schedule of the travel including places to visit, accommodation and food.

Thank you so much for consideration of my request.

I look forward to a prompt response from you.

Yours faithfully,

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 103, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'fathered'.
Suggestion: fathered
...ip to a foreign country. Actually, I am father of Tichu, who is a student of X standar...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, look, moreover, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 743.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 171.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34502923977 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58496731454 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.643274853801 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 290.88556701 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.632030212 44.8134815571 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5555555556 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 4.34317383033 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175256330692 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658443911614 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337870358056 0.0603063233224 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0708893193553 0.12726935374 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429378294011 0.0580467560999 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 8.37731958763 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.95 8.71597938144 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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