Dear Mr. Friis,
I am glad that the school has given the option to pupils’ parents to accompany them on the trip, which is due next month.
The reason why I am happy with this announcement from your side is that, unfortunately, my son is suffering from asthma and due to which his mother and I never allow him to go alone especially when it is foreign travel. So, this will allow me to be with him and it will comfort his mother.
Although my addition to the trip is necessary for my son, however, it will also benefit the other children as I have been to the trip destination of Singapore a couple of times. I am also befriended with few local expert tour guides and that would allow us to explore the most in those three days.
I hope if you would be able to share with me the details and schedule of those three days so that I could have a look and advice for any suitable additions or amendments to the plan. I am certain that you can leverage my past traveling experience and connections to make the most out of this journey.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Bilal Ahmed
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 184, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le additions or amendments to the plan. I am certain that you can leverage my pas...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to make the most out of this journey. I look forward to hearing from you. ...
^^^
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... make the most out of this journey. I look forward to hearing from you. Y...
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Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Bilal Ahmed
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 915.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 208.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39903846154 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45476362611 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610576923077 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 280.8 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.9108716978 44.8134815571 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.666666667 76.5299724578 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1111111111 16.8248392259 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169603936322 0.216113520407 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632672030563 0.0766984524023 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0258604408509 0.0603063233224 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799399829272 0.12726935374 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0128689901783 0.0580467560999 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 8.37731958763 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 70.7449484536 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.