your child is going on three days school trip to another country the head teacher wants to find parents to go with the groups and you would like to go write to the head teacher and write why you like to go on the trip suggest what you could do to help dur

Essay topics:

your child is going on three days school trip to another country. the head teacher wants to find parents to go with the groups
and you would like to go.
write to the head teacher and write
why you like to go on the trip
suggest what you could do to help during the trip
ask other question about the trip.

Dear Mr Smith,

I am Navdeep Puri, penning this epistle to convey my ascent to go with a school tour to Canada, which is going to schedule on first week of following month. As i am a busy professional who hardly finds quality time to spend with offspring, so this trip might endow me an opportunity to mingle up more with my children.

Being a travel bug,i cogitate that i have a vast experience about traveling .Thus, my exhaustive knowledge would be conductive in multiplying the adventure of this trip. Moreover, I am also a citizen of Canada,so it would be quite easy for me to arrange all amenities while on trip as i have strong relations with hoteliers.

It would be highly appreciable if you apprise me with full itinerary of tour in advance so that i can figure out adequate time for this trip. Kindly inform me about cost of this tour and guide me about it's mode of payment .
I am eagerly waiting for your response.

Yours faithfully
Navdeep Puri.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...erly waiting for your response. Yours faithfully Navdeep Puri.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 800.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 173.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62427745665 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63644688172 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664739884393 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.5382750902 44.8134815571 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 76.5299724578 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 16.8248392259 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 4.34317383033 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 2.54639175258 550% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14212963989 0.216113520407 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588403534401 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426678342463 0.0603063233224 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0758841042273 0.12726935374 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424240954621 0.0580467560999 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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