Your children go to a local school that requires volunteers to accompany school science trips Write a letter to the school to apply to be a volunteer In the letter Introduce yourself and give details of your children who attend the school Explain why you

Essay topics:

Your children go to a local school that requires volunteers to accompany school science trips.

Write a letter to the school to apply to be a volunteer. In the letter:

– Introduce yourself and give details of your children who attend the school
– Explain why you are interested in the position
– Talk about any relevant experience that you have with children

Submitted by Aj534160 on Sun, 03/08/2020 - 00:13

To whom it may concern,

I am writing to express my interest in the position of Lead Software Engineer that was advertised in The Times newspaper on 24/09/2017.

My education consists of a Bachelor’s Degree with first class honours in Computer Science from the University of Manchester, as well as a Master’s Degree in Applied Software Engineering from the University of Barcelona, where I assisted in the development of an artificial intelligence that has the ability to recognise individual personality traits in humans with great accuracy.

Further to this, I have since worked for Intel Corporation as a Senior Engineer for over eight years. My main responsibilities centred around the management of a team of fifteen developers whose job it was to provide machine code solutions to processing problems. I believe it is this well-developed problem solving ability which makes me a suitable candidate for a leadership position at your esteemed company.

Finally, I have been compelled to participate in the technology sector since I was a teenager, and so my enthusiasm for the industry is considerable.

Please find my CV attached for your perusal, and I look forward to discussing this opportunity further at interview.

Yours faithfully,
Nicola Sturgeon

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'artificial intelligence'.
Suggestion: artificial intelligence
... where I assisted in the development of an artificial intelligence that has the ability to recognise indiv...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...raits in humans with great accuracy. Further to this, I have since worked for Intel ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, look, may, so, thus, well, as to, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1084.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42 4.54256449028 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28723287888 2.54303337028 129% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 290.88556701 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.6569463906 44.8134815571 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 135.5 76.5299724578 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 16.8248392259 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 4.34317383033 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0438387106199 0.216113520407 20% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0234214139668 0.0766984524023 31% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0249345862801 0.0603063233224 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.015952132075 0.12726935374 13% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0129168772793 0.0580467560999 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 8.37731958763 198% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 70.7449484536 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 7.45979381443 190% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 8.71597938144 166% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 7.59969072165 135% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 41.2886597938 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 8.62886597938 249% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'artificial intelligence'.
Suggestion: artificial intelligence
... where I assisted in the development of an artificial intelligence that has the ability to recognise indiv...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...raits in humans with great accuracy. Further to this, I have since worked for Intel ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, look, may, so, thus, well, as to, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1084.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42 4.54256449028 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28723287888 2.54303337028 129% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 290.88556701 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.6569463906 44.8134815571 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 135.5 76.5299724578 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 16.8248392259 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 4.34317383033 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0438387106199 0.216113520407 20% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0234214139668 0.0766984524023 31% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0249345862801 0.0603063233224 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.015952132075 0.12726935374 13% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0129168772793 0.0580467560999 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 8.37731958763 198% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 70.7449484536 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 7.45979381443 190% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 8.71597938144 166% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 7.59969072165 135% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 41.2886597938 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 8.62886597938 249% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.