Your family is going to move to another town Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests You do NOT need to write any address

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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

You do NOT need to write any address.

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter to request for accepting my son as a new student of your school, Indeed, my family and I moved to this city recently due to my job emission while we were living in Tehran.
My son, Barsam, is 15 years old and he is studying in eighth grade of middle school. He is very talented and dingy boy. Mostly he sat on the top of superb students in his last school. Moreover, it is about 2 years that he has been involved in robotic student team of Tehran and he also was awarded as the youngest programmer of Iran in last year.
As I mentioned above, he is taking a knack for programming and robotic. Besides he is very keen on mathematics because of his dynamic mind. As I had heard about the sparkling and successful history of your school, I found out your school can provides an appropriate situation for my son for motivating him to make more concerted effort and try to do hist best for contributing to success of your school.
I look forward to receiving your response and please let me know if you require any further information. My cellphone number is below.

Cellphone: 0098XXX
Your faithfully,
Sahar

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 73, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Besides,
...ng a knack for programming and robotic. Besides he is very keen on mathematics because ...
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Line 4, column 243, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...our school, I found out your school can provides an appropriate situation for my son for...
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Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ormation. My cellphone number is below. Cellphone: 0098XXX Your faithfully, Sa...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, moreover, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 948.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 209.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53588516746 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61931024397 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650717703349 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 288.0 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.4228104264 44.8134815571 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1818181818 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 4.34317383033 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193367285886 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594159504885 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581873105057 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10983696277 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486716451235 0.0580467560999 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 8.37731958763 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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