Your local hospital has advertised people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time.Write a letter to the hospital. In your letterexplain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospita

Dear Sir,
I have noticed your advertisement for charity work. Therefore I was determined by a great decision. I believe that this event will make patients happy. As well as that leads to increase their morale and motivation. And most importantlly, doing such things is a social duty.
Anyway, I am a guitarist and a member of a music band. I would like to perform several relish full tracks for patients especially, children. Majic of music can help to improve in caring duration. Not only we able to play music but also we can teach some instruments absolutely, all of them will be unpaid work.
Also, that is my pleasure to announce. we can do the program for Thanksgiving and the end of every month meanwhile, next Monday we will be ready to teach music. surely, we will be continuing this for several weeks.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Farhood Salami

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Average: 4.5 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 53, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ed your advertisement for charity work. Therefore I was determined by a great decision. I...
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Line 4, column 39, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
... Also, that is my pleasure to announce. we can do the program for Thanksgiving and...
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Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Surely
...Monday we will be ready to teach music. surely, we will be continuing this for several...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, look, so, therefore, well, while, as well as, as well as that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 26.3917525773 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 742.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 156.0 206.0 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75641025641 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70643424542 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.692307692308 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 16.3608247423 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.6359919183 44.8134815571 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 53.0 76.5299724578 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.1428571429 16.8248392259 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 4.34317383033 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150285510437 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440268382647 0.0766984524023 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486632883812 0.0603063233224 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0757876173345 0.12726935374 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373734823698 0.0580467560999 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 8.37731958763 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 70.7449484536 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.14 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 8.62886597938 58% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 8.54432989691 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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