Mobile phones and the Internet are useful tools. However, not many elderly people use them. In what ways can mobile phones and the Internet be useful to elderly people? How can elderly people be encouraged to use them?

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Mobile phones and the Internet are useful tools. However, not many elderly people use them. In what ways can mobile phones and the Internet be useful to elderly people? How can elderly people be encouraged to use them?

We have witnessed the rapid advancement of technology in society. However, It is argued that not many elderly people use those devices. In this essay, I will discuss the possible benefits for this phenomenon and elaborate below.

There are certainly some benefits of using phones and the internet. One of the merits is that it is convenient for the elders to keep in touch with friends and family. By simply having a mobile phone ,elders are no longer need to travel a long distance to visit old friends. As a result, they can save energy and as well as accumulate knowledge of using mobile phone from daily basis. Another advantage is obtain latest news and information from those devices immediately. Senior citizens, in most cases, used to read newspaper in the morning, therefore, using computers and mobiles to access internet allows them read breaking news from online instead of waiting for newspaper.

Fortunately, there are some easy ways to encourage elderly people to use cell phones and internet. To begin with, free internet in the public libraries. Many elders, for example, love to read books from library, but sometimes the books are borrowed out by others. Providing free internet generally encourages the elders to use computers to access internet to read the articles. Apart from this, manufactures can design new patterns which particular suit old people. Having easy functions and features would more likely to captivate the attention of the elderly people to use it.

In conclusion, although some elders are not use cell phones and internet, it still has some easy ways to encourage the elderly people to use them.

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elders are no longer need to
elders no longer need to

Another advantage is obtain latest news
Another advantage is to obtain latest news

To begin with, free internet in the public libraries.
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new patterns which particular suit old people.
new patterns which particularly fit old people.

Having easy functions and features would more likely to captivate the attention of the elderly people to use it.
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although some elders are not use not cell phones and internet,
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Nowadays, with technology developing dramatically in last two to three decades, mobile phones and internet become more and more popular, and they are becoming essential parts of our lives, especially for youngster. However, they are not used widely among elder people. In this essay, I will discuss the reason and provide solutions to promote the usage of mobile and internet in elder people.

Firstly, many elder people might not have the knowledge to use smart phone and laptops. They were not fully trained on the correct way to use these equipment. This problem can be tackled by providing proper training to them. For example, when i got my first laptop, my parents even didn't know how to turn on and turn off it. After i taught them few days, then were able to use computer to browser internet and even play some simple games. Now, they already can use the computer skillfully and we often make video call to each other.

Furthermore, the interest to use computer and mobile phone might not exist among elder people. The reason is that the utilization of these IT equipment is not linked to their interest in life. The best way to encourage them to use is finding a common interest between the internet world and life. For instance, my uncle like playing cards with his friends during his leisure time, once he found computer also could play some kind game remotely, he was stimulated to use the computer to play games with his friends. It offered another convenient options to him. In addition, the games opened a gate for him to explore other functions in computer, gradually, he became an expert of computer.

In conclusion, if proper training can be offered to elder people, they would be able to start to explore the mobile and internet, and if could find a way to stimulate their interest is one of the best way to encourage elder people to use mobile and internet.