Advances in computer technology allow young adults to work from home and children to study at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative change?
Nowadays, young adults and children are easier to work from home or study at home by the development of computer technology. In my point of view, this can be positive or negative depending on the way people use it.
On the one hand, there is no denial that computer technology is extremely advantageous in our life. Firstly, working from home would create the loneliness. People have to communicate through screen such as Zoom, Google Meet for solving the problems from works or decide some important plans during the long period of Covid-19. As a result, loneliness would lead to the depression, and the quantity of their work would fall down significantly. Not only that, by using technology, students usually loss concentration. For example, many researchers claim that the quantity of knowledge students have learnt from online lessons is not good as studying directly at school because of the interruption of the Internet or the effect of surrounding environment. Consequently, their knowledge is not enough for higher class, and some children would feel the failure even if they are just a kids.
On the other hand, I believe that computer technology is more positive because of some advantages below. Thanks to technology, younger people can have higher income because of more and more works they can do. For example, many young designers choose to work as freelancer as they can work for different companies at one time as collaborations. As the time is flexible, they have more time for family or friends to take a holiday more frequently. With children, by using computer technology, more knowledge that they can access through online site, debate a large number of hard questions they have never known before. By doing this, they can grasp more understanding about other fields.
In conclusion, because computer technology is negative for young adults and children in some aspects, I would argue that it is more positive to work from home and study at home.
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Suggestion: a kid; kids
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0490797546 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78894248024 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51226993865 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8746593993 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.875 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315374385514 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119227343234 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147762680448 0.0667982634062 221% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295665788668 0.151304729494 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.172366711469 0.056905535591 303% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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