Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People claim that the competitions of sports should not have in the learning program, either individual or team. Although competitive sports would create some possible advantages, I would agree that this activity should be had in school curriculum because some advantages this decision can bring.
On the one hand, it is no denial that competitive sports for children would bring some drawbacks. Firstly, the expense for taking competition is extremely big-budget and it would lead to be financial burdens on school and parents. As a result, parents have to pay more tuition for studying program. For example, the schools have to cover some expenditures such as examiner’s salaries, facilities and students’ awarding. Another shortcoming is that because of having the feeling of success, they may prioritise winning over playing for fun or health. Consequently, it could affect negatively on other subjects’ result, so this causes unequal importance between subjects.
Despite the arguments above, I believe that competitive sports should be had in the school curriculum because of benefits for health and success of children. Firstly, thanks to study sports subjects, children would Improve children health by joining in the school’s competitions. For example, children nowadays spend too much time for the internet, so obesity disease is as a result of screen- based life. Therefore, I claim that the subjects about sports should be taught for children, even primary students. Another benefit is that participating these competitions would make children have the sense of achievement. Competitive give student motivation to achieve the success, and they would desire about their future in the bright and happy way.
Conclusion, although I accept some possible drawbacks of competitive sports, I would agree that this type should appear in the learning curriculum.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54703832753 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88553076616 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567944250871 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.9311909998 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.133333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233308969965 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891418551966 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733821513271 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16721720917 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691622876125 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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