Advertising discourages us from being different individuals by making us all want to be and look the same as each other To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Advertising discourages us from being different individuals by making us all want to be and look the same as each other. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been a debatable topic that advertisement is unwilling to make us to be a unique person, instead they prefer to create more and more similarities between us. I am partly stand by this statement and some reasons would be delivered in this essay.
On the one hand, advertisement has showed their robust power in persuading their clients to buy their productions. To be specific, productors always use luring word and attractive pictures to advertising their products which can inspire people’s wills to chase for a better quality of life and purchase their goods. Therefore, customers would buy the same productions which is better advertised, even though these productions is manufactured by the similar methods to other companies and contain the same elements.
On the other, most people tends to imitate others lifestyles without being affected by advertisement. Imitation is instinct of human-being, especially when they believe copy others behaviors or habits can have positive effects on their own lives. For example, some singer or movie stars have a large amount of fans. Once these celebrities wear some fashion clothes or shoes, their followers would rush to buy the same styles of commodities as their idols. That’s can explain the reason why so many companies would invite the famous to be their production spokesman.
In summary, advertisement is aim at guiding us to buy their productions and being more competitive than the other similar productions. What’s more advertising just take the advantage of out instinct of imitation to sold their goods.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'stood'.
Suggestion: stood
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, for example, in summary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2619047619 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92207952541 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615079365079 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2657836548 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18087547945 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727546785487 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602832958694 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129270042235 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476668882705 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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