For all children the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write How far do you agree with this suggestion How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument in your view

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‘For all children, the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write.’
How far do you agree with this suggestion? How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument, in your view?

There has been much discussion revolving around the issue which the ability to play a musical instrument for all children is just as important as the ability to read and write. In spite of the issue that some people, parents, agree with this matter, I grudgingly agree. I, furthermore, think it could not be far-fetched to hold the view that plays a musical instrument is not significant for some children.
On the one hand, children being disabled children may not have enough ability. Simply put, disable children who have not hands could not play a musical instrument. A good illustration of this is children who are limited by genetic problems while they were born. This kind of genetic problem can include limited movements in their body, such as their hands, and they could be a person with a different shape of the body. This means all children may have not enough ability to play a musical instrument because they could be intelligent people to be in the highest ranking of education such as Stephen Hawking. Accordingly play a musical instrument is not as important as the ability to read and write.
On the other hand, I do believe that learning pieces of music are absolutely important for children. This is owing to the music’s effect on their brains. It means children’s brains, faced with different musical instruments, have a better repercussion to decode the problems in their upcoming. In fact, let us take the example of a person who has played piano learned to use both sides of their brain against other children. It is mainly because music has worthwhile benefits on brains.
Accordingly, although I agree that musical instruments have an effect on children's learning, in no way do I agree that play a musical instrument is as principal as read and write.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Accordingly,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, furthermore, if, may, so, while, in fact, kind of, such as, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.875 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71632459793 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480263157895 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2103726062 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.475519739335 0.244688304435 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184168978636 0.084324248473 218% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147727471559 0.0667982634062 221% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.324355373476 0.151304729494 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0972752782286 0.056905535591 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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