In this era of global innovation, the fast-paced development of technology has brought a myriad of benefits to the lives of human beings. However, a recent opinion has risen that due to affordable prices and enhanced accessibility, both adults and children have a tendency to work or study from home. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this view.
There are several drawbacks of telecommuting or teleworking that could affect adults and children. Firstly, it is undeniable that this approach can have negative impacts on physical health. In more detail, they have to spend too much time focusing on the computer screen without interacting with other people. As a result, there are various detrimental indicators associated with their health such as diminishing their vision, causing discomfort in their shoulder and neck.Moreover, there could be a significant decline in not only their physical health but also their mental health. It seems that they tend to become isolated because of limiting interaction with other people such as teachers, co-workers and so on. As a consequence, they experience loneliness while working or studying at home, thus leading to weaker relationships among colleagues and teachers.
Some people believe that technology aids workers and students in achieving flexible working or studying hours. However, this can make them more easily distracted from their tasks without proper principles. To be explained, home is not an ideal environment to maintain high concentration on their duties. They can easily lose their focus by their kids, pets surrounding them during the time they work and study.As a consequence, their productivity can be reduced in the case and lead to bad performance later. Besides, this method can lead to weaker relationships in the working or studying environment due to declining communication between each other. Obviously, applying technology seems to become a significant barrier for adults and students in strengthening relationships with other colleagues and teachers.
In conclusion, engaging in remote work or study yields more drawbacks than benefits including harmful health, worse relationships and reduced productivity. Schools and companies should take this issue into consideration for long term to avoid above negative developments
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57670454545 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07637662989 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579545454545 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7829739429 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.470588235 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211568632534 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710402484238 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042466634965 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140782644529 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032431163642 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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