Leaving good fame in the history, owning abundance of wealth at present, many people would like to be famous. Not only the stories those celebrities left, even the fortune they are posessing, but also the unique experience they has been through is so facinating that more and more people are on their way chasing for the superstar career. However, after knowing lots of stories, it is not a good choice to be famous in my opinion. In that when you are enjoing the benefits of the vanity fair, what you are suffering may be beyond your imagination.
To begin with, almost everyone want to be famous. Turn on the TV you can find lots of entertainment shows of competitions among several youth singing or dancing, who want to be a pop star like Taylor Swift or Michael Jackson. Once they won the competition, they will be a contracted artist, labeling as being really famous. Then the wealth comes after the fame, most of these pop stars live luxurious lives that being admired by people. This is the story that people would like to have since they can realize their value on this stage.
Unfortunately, this is not the whole picture of being a celebrity. On the other hand, the life of them can be easily out of control which is also known by people from media. No matter Taylor Swift or Michael Jackson, they all got troubles after their being famous. The coutry music star Taylor is almost a joke among young people since her scandals, most of them, are being dumped by her boyfriends. In another word, you can hardly have a private life as a celebrity.
What's worse, Michael Jackson, the pop king, was charged with sexual harassment to children, which is a serious crime in US. This story, even it was not true perhaps, brought many troubles to him which nearly made him bankrupt. Moreover, sometimes, the truth of these pop stars' life is not more important than their scandals.
In all, being famous is not what many people imagined. More often, the life after being famous is what people can not handle with.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...ng, but also the unique experience they has been through is so facinating that more...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
... have a private life as a celebrity. Whats worse, Michael Jackson, the pop king, w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 13.1623246493 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66946778711 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34532915707 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53781512605 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7741567167 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7368421053 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223159078777 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749333227998 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444220652018 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132865709626 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576100073977 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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