Being a celebrity, such as famous film star or sports personality, brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think the advantages of being a celebrity outweigh its disadvantages?
Celebrities are public figures and attract attention wherever they go; thus, many people wish to become famous in the entertainment industry. Although being a celebrity has certain advantages, it could also create trouble.
On the one hand, working as a celebrity has many profits for people. Firstly, singers or actors can only earn well if they receive praise and attention from the public with their artwork. Moreover, a celebrity could maintain others' attention and earn admiration from people when they have proper manners and personality. The more talented and well-mannered they are, the more fame and wealth celebrities obtain. For example, Rihanna is a well-known singer who received prestigious awards and love from fans for her contributions to the music industry.
On the other hand, I believe the dark side behind a celebrity's life is more severe as it brings serious problems to people. Specifically, if famous people are involved in a scandal, the perfect image they show to the public might receive harsh criticism. Therefore, being a public figure could hinder them from living normally. Furthermore, celebrities' privacy is insecure as the public is curious about their personal life. Thus, some paparazzi even spend time invading and exposing celebrities' privacy to draw people's notice. Whatever famous people do could be captured by strangers, so they cannot live comfortably without others' notice. Therefore, the more famous a person becomes, the more threat poses to their private life. Some Korean pop idols, for instance, are heavily criticized when the press releases unpermitted photos of them dating, although they do nothing illegal.
In conclusion, being famous can bring fame and prosperity to people, but it threatens their privacy and damages their image when they make mistakes. I believe that its disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41095890411 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75077395752 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595890410959 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8230492157 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.9411764706 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1764705882 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23529411765 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230407036915 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798896702406 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428620298189 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149578317529 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321622805579 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.