Both governments and individuals are spending too much money protecting animals and their habitat. This money could be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society .what extend do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that it is better when the government and citizens gather to allocate the increasing amount of money to address some dilemmas in social life inlieu of spending this means preserving other species and their surrounding areas. In my opinion, i supose the money from the authority and local people should be poured into both animal protections and social priorities.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why the government and inhabitants should conserve animals with financial aids. Firstly, every species plays a indispensable role in food chain and natural ecosytem ‘s balance even they are tiny, not are, not worth such as bees, butterflies. If there has an advent of few animals, it can lead to the food chain disorder and put other animals at great risk of extinction as some animals maintain their lives mainy by hunting other species. Secondly, public money should spend on conservation campaigns and wildlife sentunctaries since this could minimize serious impacts of climate changes. For example, in Vietnam, the million dollar conservations projects from the governors such as planting more trees in coastal regions have an positive impact on reducing the casualty , and loss of property from floods in Thanh Hoa province.
On the other hand,finacial supports also have better been spent tacking serious problems in society such as education and health care system. In the real world, there are some countries with lowerr literacy rate than the others because of insufficient money in contructing schools and trainning teachers. Meaning that, it is likely to attribute to higher crime rate and unemployment rate as people do not have ability to get access to and understand the laws. In terms of heathcare conditions, if the government channel money into deterent to the depletion of vulnerable animals, the means for healthcare systems will be not as much as before. Therefore, there are unlikeky to expand hospitals, construct reseach and develop departments for drugs, worse, the nation could not have capacity of dealing with epidemic breaking out.
In my conlusion,i belive that not only the government but also local inhabitants need to iron out some severe phenomena which are correlate with animal protection and society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26243093923 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71282871288 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618784530387 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.7464186567 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.538461538 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8461538462 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243010659029 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776884941855 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492659804157 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139958644236 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496218102027 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.99 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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