In certain countries, unemployment is so high that some have suggested children should stop their education after primary school to learn skills necessary to join the workforce.
Do you agree or disagree?
In some countries with high joblessness, there is a common assertion that children's giving priority to learn essential skills to meet the demand of labor market after their elementary level is of paramout importance. However, I personally disagree with this suggestion and this essay will shed the light on justification why I am not in favor of it.
To embark on, it is undisputable that abolishing children's access to upper academic programme leads to the significant shortage of fundamental knowledge and intensive expertise which prevent them from satisfying the speciality of their future job . For example, if you wish to apply for the post as an accountant, you have to cultivate relavant job skills regarding the ability to analyse financial data, the comprehension of Computer Science and the impressive command of English language which are significantly attributed to formal schooling .Additionally thanks to high-level education, you are assured to attain quality qualifications which are considered to be chief determinant that the employers are inclined to assess whether you are qualifed to work or not.
Futhermore, schooling system offers students subjects like sports and music which are regarded as indispensable soft skills . While they may not be directly useful in securing employment, they indirectly make a candidate more employable. Apart from technical expertise, firms currently attach greater attention to credentials such as adaptability, originality and communication skills and to some extent they are ground-breaking elements which makes you superior to other candidates . These attributes are likely to be attained in experiences like playing sports and music. Hence, attending school after primary level is terribly justifiable due to its potential to make people's employability higher and higher.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, while, apart from, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67272727273 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19936882394 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.68 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.915082267 49.4020404114 253% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.333333333 106.682146367 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5555555556 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194888225602 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664684950578 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577552679487 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125874594887 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422519206768 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 13.0946893788 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.11 50.2224549098 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 11.3001002004 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.2 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.38 8.58950901804 132% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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