The number of childhood obesity has increased dramatically compared with the past, and this being an overweight is starting a massive problem in the industrialized world. For this reason, some group of people believe that the advertisement of fast food, sweets and sugary snacks should be banned in schools and colleges. In this essay, ideas and some sollutions related to this problem will be given.
To begin with, having a healthy eating habits is not a common idea in these industialized world, because people generally have the idea of quickly owning and consuming. Furthermore, having a desire to earn more money in people has even spoiled the quality of the food, and it effected people grow vegetables and fruits before the date of consumption. For example, we can eat strawberries in winter. Furthermore, compared with own ancestors, today's world people live a less active life, especially children, and they spend hours in front of the television, computers and also video games. Actually, the major reason for childhood obesity is the more attention of advertising and promotions. The global advertising companies know that large income is provided by children and should influence them, because in the developed world, children are very affected by advertisement and are not interested in being food health.
As a result, childhood obesity is becoming a problem, and these situation can negative effect on children health. For example, obesity can increase the risk of diebets and hypertension at a little age. However, it is probably impossible to prevent such a this situation, but there are several things to do to reduce the rate. For example, the introduction and even sale of such harmfull sugary snacks, fast food and sweets should be prohibited in schools and colleges. In addition, families should make healthier and balanced food at home that their children will take to eat at schools and colleges. However, that is just not enough, parents should provide a more active life for children, and encourage various sports activities.
In conclusion, removing adverts for unhealthy food at schools and colleges is a method that will significantly prevent obesity, but it is also important to lead a more active life for children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21487603306 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83037440699 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528925619835 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0895442997 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.3125 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6875 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36713288253 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117440158811 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847282280097 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226975689645 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123644700823 0.056905535591 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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