Children today are dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and joining in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors. do you agree or disagree with this view.
In this day and age, children spend almost their time watching TV or playing game on computers or mobile phones. Coming with the modern world, computers have been invented and have revolutionised the way we learn, work and socialise. The advancement of technology in this domain has given birth to smart phone, tablet, mp3 player, … which are becoming an integral part of human’s life. However, it can not be denied that children are getting more dependent on these electronic devices and they are recommended to participate in outdoor activities and go out to play different sports. I completely agree with this view and in this following essay I will support my stand with the benefits of outdoor activities that they broaden children’s horizon and affect on children’s well-being.
To begin with, physical activities provide chance to widen students’ horizon and grow up fully. When joining in outdoor activities, students are capable of making friends and sharing knowledge and they will build up problem-solving skill by dealing with difficult situation themselves so that children can have a knack of solving abrupt issues effectively. Getting involve in traditional activities helps children be more knowledgeable in order that there will be less people asserting that tradition is anachronism.
Furthermore, outdoor games have positive impacts on children’s health. These days, children spend most of their time sitting in front of screen for a long time, due to this there will be the lack of movements and this leads to several health problems such as obesity, short-sightness,…. Therefore, children need to spend time outdoors, participating in sport activities in order to develop healthily.
To recapitulate, with the advancement of teachnology, children use computer as entertaining devices but they are not aware of the disadvantages of them. It is undeniably better for them to take part in outdoor activities and traditional pastimes instead of only spending time indoors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1702.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43769968051 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11477184265 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603833865815 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5699100378 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.923076923 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304184647617 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102730968586 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587380243549 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181246735379 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447798073325 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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