Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional past times than spending all day indoors. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Write an essay of about 250 words to express your opinion.
In this technological era, it is the over-dependence of children on using electronics for entertainment that raises question about whether they had better spend time on outdoor activities. In my opinion, I do agree with this statement in cosideration of the health improvement and soft skills achieving kids wil gain back from these activites.
To begin with, sports and pastimes undoubtedly enhance their physical fitness. The popular reality that children nowadays spend endless time on such technologies as play stations and computer has sparked concerns about their health. That will increase the risk of coming down with not only eyes illness but also obesity, high blood pressure, etc. Accordingly, participating in sports will let children make movement and and leave the screen and make progress with their own physical ability.
On the other hand, by being involved in sports and traditional leisure activities, youngsters stand a god chance of sharpening their soft skills. It goes without saying that essential working skills are definitely required if you want to get a job with competitive salary. Surprisingly, these skills are related to sports and team games. In fact, to be a good team, besides members have to put their thoughts to each others, they also need the ability to work smoothly together, which leads to early awareness of teamwork skill of a child.
As mentioned, the advent of technology enables children to access electronic gadgets and become addicted. Therefore, it is advisable infants should join in outdoor activity to avoid sedentary lifestyle and be fully developed
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 417, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
... sports will let children make movement and and leave the screen and make progress with...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, if, so, therefore, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34645669291 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85451533478 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.688976377953 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.72436428 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.166666667 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221529087816 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688443803696 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403415962318 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117013641135 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402103110047 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 417, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
... sports will let children make movement and and leave the screen and make progress with...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, if, so, therefore, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34645669291 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85451533478 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.688976377953 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.72436428 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.166666667 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221529087816 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688443803696 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403415962318 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117013641135 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402103110047 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.