Computers are being used more and more in education.
Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences.
Discuss both sides of this argument and give your own opinion.
Computers for comprehensive education purposes show an upward trend because of making the learning process faster, while I formally argue this can lead to infobesity for school pupils.
The modern computers are completed with cutting-edge technologies that support school pupils to find any helpful information faster, saving more time. By only typing things on this device, the contents soon appear on the screen, compared to reading printed books which consume much time. Taking four-grade elementary schools in Jakarta as an example, when a science teacher asks the students to find how the photosynthesis on a butterfly happens, they may obtain the result in less than 10 seconds by googling. However, in my opinion, the more resources students have, the more confused they are.
On the other hand, by accessing more data on the computer, the school-students tend to become confused, being unable to process the information. That is to say, when more and more references are accessed by students, this results in confusion in choosing the correct ones. To illustrate this, if year-six-students are ordered to look for the history of Bali on the sophisticated computer, they can see more than a thousand articles on the screen related to the task. Therefore, I believe over-information leads to confusion for the students to determine which one the correct information is.
To sum up, even though computers can be used to support the pupils to get certain materials rapidly, in my opinion over-information through computer use causes students confusion when. If possible, while students operate the computers properly, teachers should limit the number of websites that could be accessed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, while, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1435.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37453183521 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02567021422 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61797752809 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4466010992 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.454545455 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2727272727 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7272727273 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243149860059 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938788301175 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576009577873 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146108081983 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271036059525 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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