Describe an idea you have had for improving something at college or work.
You should include:
When and where had you had the idea ?
what the idea was ?
Who you told about your idea ?
and explain why you think that your idea made a difference ?
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"Times New Roman";color:black;mso-themecolor:text1">I would like to talk about my initiate in my second company 5 years ago.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom: 0.0001pt; line-height: 150%; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial; vertical-align: baseline;"><span style="font-size:13.0pt;
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"Times New Roman";color:black;mso-themecolor:text1">My first job was an auditor for an international auditing firm Grant Thornton, so my English was relatively
good at communicating with foreigners. After that, I moved to my second
company, which is a local company, so my English ability was decreasing. In addition,
many of my colleagues hated English and they could not communicate in English. Therefore,
I thought that we should have a solution to encourage somebody to study
English, and make English environment for them to join, then I came up with hiring
American teacher to teach English for my company’s employees. After I talked my
idea to my Director, he appreciated my idea and allowed me to present my idea
to our CEO. Fortunately, she agreed and supported my initiate immediately.
However, it was a difficult for class arrangement at that time because most of
staffs got married, so they only wanted to spend time on their families. Due to
my company has the working time from 8 A.M, CEO of my company also stimulated
English, so the English class were held from 7.30 AM to 9 AM every working day.
This provided the employees with opportunity to study and practice English. Before
attending the English class, most of employees were afraid and scared to meet
the foreigners. After 3 months, it was
actually different because most of them felt more self-confident to talk and
communicate with foreigners. This is an achievement for the employees in the
local company.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , serif
...;font-family:"Times New Roman",serif;mso-fareast-font-family: "Times ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , serif
...;font-family:"Times New Roman",serif;mso-fareast-font-family: "Times ...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Good
...hornton, so my English was relatively good at communicating with foreigners. After...
^^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Company
...ers. After that, I moved to my second company, which is a local company, so my Englis...
^^^^^^^
Line 21, column 68, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nglish for my company's employees. After I talked my idea to my Director, he a...
^^^^^
Line 25, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...dea and allowed me to present my idea to our CEO. Fortunately, she agreed and su...
^^
Line 29, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Staffs
...angement at that time because most of staffs got married, so they only wanted to spe...
^^^^^^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
... spend time on their families. Due to my company has the working time from 8 A.M...
^^
Line 31, column 42, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: M
...y company has the working time from 8 A.M, CEO of my company also stimulated En...
^
Line 37, column 30, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the employees') or simply say ''most employees''.
Suggestion: most of the employees; most employees
.... Before attending the English class, most of employees were afraid and scared to meet the fo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 43, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Communicate
... felt more self-confident to talk and communicate with foreigners. This is an achievement...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 7.45367412141 5.12529762239 145% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 7.6238775211 2.80592935109 272% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546325878594 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.60771543086 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 330.256174047 49.4020404114 669% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 212.090909091 106.682146367 199% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4545454545 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0549811650191 0.244688304435 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0307487121914 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433343969676 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.022903780749 0.151304729494 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413555257141 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.9 13.0946893788 213% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 9.22 50.2224549098 18% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 11.3001002004 167% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 26.23 12.4159519038 211% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 40.5 9.78957915832 414% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 28.0 10.7795591182 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.