In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.
Some people think that the increase in the average life span is showing one of the good changes in society, the others reckon that it still has a myriad of issues that cannot be predicted. Therefore/Besides, we still have some reasonable measures to address these problems.
On the first hand, there are some problems which are all related to average life-time. Firstly, if we have more old people than the young ones, we will be faced with a huge obstacle - taxes. The more retired workers, the more taxes that the young pay to adapt and support for the national budget. Because the government has shouldered a huge responsibility for taking care of senior citizens who no longer have the ability to earn for a living, it is undoubted that the increase in the average life expectancy can be regarded as the most serious problem. Furthermore, this issue can also be seen as a fundamental element for the rising of healthcare services. These services should be improved first when the government takes their consideration into the quality of their residents' life.
On the other hand, there are some suggestions given to address these problems most effectively. The government should impose new laws in order to prolong the time that workers have to retire. Besides, we need to limit the migration of people who cross overseas to work. Some developed nations have a brilliant campaign in order to encourage young adults to come to these countries to work as a caretaker, and we need to share analogous tax for people of all ages to reduce the pressure that young people bear- paying for the welfare. Moreover, the administration should improve healthcare services, the area which has a primary purpose that is enhancing the quality of health for old generations.
In conclusion, although average life expectancy is the sign of a fortunate and prosperous country, it also produces more obstacles and challenges that the government must take actions to tackle thoroughly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, as to, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91158536585 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67715391942 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512195121951 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 328.0 20.2975951904 1616% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1611.0 106.682146367 1510% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 328.0 20.7667163134 1579% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 119.0 7.06120827912 1685% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241576118423 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.241576118423 0.084324248473 286% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141705797676 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504557367961 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 165.7 13.0946893788 1265% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -261.44 50.2224549098 -521% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 131.2 11.3001002004 1161% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.68 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 24.14 8.58950901804 281% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 9.78957915832 541% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 133.2 10.1190380762 1316% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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