Discuss your opinion on how modernism can affect our health. What can the government do to overcome such situations?
Modern life can be very taxing. Today, we live faster, work more and have less free time than ever before. In addition, our conveniences come at the expense of the purity of the environment. In this essay I intend to delve into the negative effects of modernism on our health and the steps that can be taken to overcome them.
There is an age old saying, ―We are what we eat‖. This holds good even today. Nowadays, good food is hard to find. Many people are eating the quickest and the cheapest foods they can find, which, unfortunately, are the least nutritious. They lead to obesity which can predispose to many diseases such as hypertension and obesity.
The second major effect of modernism is lack of exercise. Machines and the automobiles have made our lifestyle very sedentary. In addition to it, the fast paced lifestyle and the IT revolution have increased our expectations from work. Not only that, the consumerist society also makes us work more. This makes us workaholics and as a result we suffer from stress which has led many to a nervous breakdown.
Many steps can be taken to combat the negative effects of modernism. The best way to do this is to start educating people on how to live a healthier life. This has to be done on a large scale. The government can take the help of the media for this purpose. There should be a ban on the ads of fast foods. People have to be told the difference between a healthy meal and a fattening one. Secondly, exercise should be incorporated in our daily routine. For short distances, people should be encouraged to walk. This would kill two birds with one stone as people would be healthy and also pollution from vehicles would reduce. This pollution also causes health problems. Finally, government should fix working hours. This would give people more time to relax and exercise.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, modernism can affect our physical and mental health but government can take many steps to lessen these effects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
...ion to it, the fast paced lifestyle and the IT revolution have increased our expectati...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, second, secondly, so, as to, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69886363636 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54230095843 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551136363636 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6315003458 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.2592592593 106.682146367 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.037037037 20.7667163134 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18518518519 7.06120827912 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229289661249 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572190040247 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729248581876 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14659251304 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869175268518 0.056905535591 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 13.0946893788 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 50.2224549098 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.09 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.