Do you believe that professional athlete make good role models for young people?
Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience.
People everywhere like watching sports. Many top athletes are admired throughout their countries, and some even have fans all around the world. These athletes are good role models for young people in many ways, although in some ways they can also be a bad example.
Top athletes get the attention of young people. Most children and teenagers like to follow professional sports. Professional athletes become heroes to them, and children want to be like their heroes. This means they will want to play sports, which is good for their health. Playing sports also teaches important lessons such as teamwork and learning how to lose and win gracefully. Professional athletes also demonstrate the importance of working hard for your goals, of practicing regularly to become good at something. This is a good example for children to follow.
However, professional athletes are not always good role models. For one thing, the most famous athletes get paid very high salaries, much higher than most normal people can expect to earn. They also get a lot of attention, not only when they play their sports, but in other parts of their lives as well. This can lead children to believe that money and fame are an important part of sports. Children might focus more on these aspects than on the fun of the game or on the challenge of learning how to play well. Then there are those athletes who behave badly. For example, some take drugs to improve their performance in their games. This kind of behavior sends the wrong message to following generation.
Professional athletes can be very good role models for children, as long as they focus on the positive aspects of playing sports.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, then, well, for example, kind of, such as, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1397.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93639575972 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46446102737 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533568904594 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0476356374 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.5263157895 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8947368421 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210531589058 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732768162351 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668007405491 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151378747563 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322353284426 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.78 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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