Parents of obese children should be punished for making their children fat.
Do you agree or disagree
It is argued that the mothers and fathers of overweight children should be penalized for allowing their offspring to become obese . This essay disagrees with this statement because parents do not control what children eat at all times and genetic factors are also to blame.
Parents are not present when children consume most of their food. When children are at school they eat snacks and have lunch and the adults have no control over their dietary intake during this time. A child could consume the vast majority of their calories during these unsupervised periods, without their mother and father's knowledge or permission, and much of this intake could take the form of junk food. A recent study found that primary school students consume an average of 75% of their daily recommended calorific allowance during school hours.
Also, genetic factors are responsible for a person's body weight. Our genes have the greatest importance in determining the way we look, and for this reason, there are people that will be overweight no matter how much exercise or how much they are careful with their diet. Recent research concluded that children who are predisposed to be obese will always weight more compared to other children with a different genetic background, even though the two groups followed the exact same workout routine and intake plan.
As a result, punishing children's parents is not the only way to solve this problem because it would think that is impossible to prohibit all about their children, and the gene is also not transformed. So, keep a child body healthy essential but we need to find feasible methods.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04814814815 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43433387193 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585185185185 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9612563644 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.909090909 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5454545455 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27272727273 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307930104424 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119363737123 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904470546553 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196517325765 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743677425983 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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