Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agr

In some parts of the world, supermarkets are flourishing rapidly therefore, putting in danger the existence of local business. A part of society thinks that local people would suffer owing to the closure of local business. I entirely agree with this notion because local markets are easily available and products are cheaper there.

To start with, the local markets are made for the residents living in a certain place, and they are in the areas which are easily accessible to most of inhabitants. The products in these markets ultimately meet the requirements of citizens. Hence, they are made in a small town, the rates of products are not high, so the people of middle and lower socioeconomic status can afford them unlike to the high priced products in supermarket. A survey of a suburb showed that only few among the whole community could bear to shop from supermarkets owing to the cost of goods there. Moreover, as they are usually built in cities, they have to pay a handsome amount to get there.

Furthermore, these local markets provide an employment to the people living there. Since they do not require one to be educated, the illiterate have the chance to work and survive in the contemporary era. As it is known, people living in small communities cannot afford to educate their child, so the closure of local markets would threaten the survival of the locals. Hence, it can be seen that these local businesses are a source of income and a mean of existence for residents living there. Moreoever, depletion of local markets would increase the crime rate as well.

To conclude, local businesses provide job opportunities to the local and aid them in meeting their needs, so their closure would in turn effect the survival of people.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the inhabitants') or simply say ''most inhabitants''.
Suggestion: most of the inhabitants; most inhabitants
...he areas which are easily accessible to most of inhabitants. The products in these markets ultimate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, moreover, so, therefore, well, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89597315436 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6229528278 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4725924497 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.214285714 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250066104693 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925125135274 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735900860842 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170649116951 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738201508712 0.056905535591 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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