Economic growth is the only way to end world poverty. However, some people say it leads to environmental damage and should be stopped. To what extent do you agree?
It is beyond dispute that economic development is essential to raise the living conditions of the poor worldwide. However, it is also argued that economic advancement might give rise to negative effects on the environment and therefore, should be totally restricted. Whilst I partially agree that economic growth is necessary and also might have an adverse influence on the environment, I believe that is is not necessarily the case that economic development should be banned.
On the one hand, there are a multitude of convincing explanations as to why economic development is crucial to improve the living standards of the destitute. For example, economic growth enables nations to produce more value and permit them to create a large number of foods to serve the poor. Other social facilities such as hospitals or educational institutions could also be built to improve the mental and physical health of the destitute. In addition, the labour market also provides the destitute with more job opportunities and therefore, joblessness would no longer be a burning issue. The destitute are therefore able to make ends meet and raise their living conditions.
On the other hand, it is no doubt true that economic growth might result in detrimental effects on the environment. Indeed, whilst more factories are built to make new products, they could also empty toxic waste into the rivers and oceans. Gas emissions and exhaust fumes including harmful gases such as carbon dioxide and nitrogen oxide are also more likely to be released into the air and therefore, might lead to air pollution and acid rain. In addition, whilst people place heavy emphasis on agriculture, deforestation might also become a severe problem, followed by the extinction of endangered and protected animals such as leopards, rhinos, or tigers. However, given the considerable benefits of economic advancement, I oppose the idea that economic development should be banned. The rationale behind my opinion is that there are a wide range of appropriate measures could be adopted in order to alleviate environmental problems. For instance, governments could impose stricter laws to reduce gas emissions and the toxic wastes that are released into the environment. The governments could also take effective actions to protect forests and endangered animals. Furthermore, manufacturing firms might apply state-of-the-art technologies to limit the toxic substances that they produce and empty into the biosphere.
In conclusion, there are a multitude of possible reasons regarding why economic advancement is essential to support the destitute. Whilst I agree that such development might cause detrimental effects on the biosphere, I oppose the view that economic development should be totally stopped.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 403, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...ence on the environment, I believe that is is not necessarily the case that economic ...
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Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ce more value and permit them to create a large number of foods to serve the poor. Other social f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, regarding, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 1615.20841683 145% => OK
No of words: 431.0 315.596192385 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44779582367 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01080359388 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498839907193 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1532313742 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.578947368 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6842105263 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182381571931 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588513926914 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554139365935 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125809850635 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421416285621 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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