It is thought by some that some high-risk sports such as sky-diving as well as skiing can put their participants in a worring hazard of losing their lives,therefore,it ought to be prohibited.To my perspective, while I partly support this assertion, I strongly believe that performing these sorts of risky sports with full alertness and high level of precaution can absolutely diute almost all unpleasent dangers to a low percentage.
Some people hold this viewpoint that there is no necessity of doing hazardous sports on the account of some genuinely true causes such as the possibility of athletes' fetality.However clearly I am of the opinion that people who are in favor of doing these dangerous sports supposed to gaurd themselves from any potential dangers by getting full training and practicing so that they can be more confident in what they are doing with a low risk of encountering hazardous zones.
Moreover,as an old saying goes better safe than sorry ,I assume if some safety regulations will be deemed by sports organization, performing these forementioned sports conspicously meets a lower risk of unfavourable hazard.
Despite some safety zones which could be advanced by sports communities for a safe performance in challeging sports such as bunjee jumping or rock climbing, I am a true follwer of this truism that resticting doing something full of danger like these sports in order to be sound and safe does not really apeal to be a neat way of solving a difficulty.In other words,instead of banning something high-risk,international sports community could really take some productive actions and present some efficient solutions to this current problem.I would clear things up by illustrating a reliable instance of Australia,land of second to none champion and olympian.In 1994, Australia unfortunately lost a great a number of their sky divers due to some malfunction parachutes besides incorret routes to how to land on earth.following this bitter happening,Australia's government launched a deprtment with host number of sports experts working in to measure all risks of this sport with the intention of minimize all anticipated risks to almost zero.Consequently the proportion of athletes who have missed their lives or suffered from severe injuries, has witnessed a remarkable decline of 68 percent.
By way of conclusion, I do agree that there are some risky sports which can cost people's lives,nonetheless the are some countless of useful techniques which can be applied to increase the saftey level of doning these sports.
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- Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view 92
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, really, second, so, therefore, well, while, such as, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 405.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31851851852 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37792397344 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58024691358 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 81.0 20.2975951904 399% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 355.688965249 49.4020404114 720% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 430.8 106.682146367 404% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 81.0 20.7667163134 390% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 27.6 7.06120827912 391% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250237141625 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137789150293 0.084324248473 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513679239027 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137789150293 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513679239027 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 44.1 13.0946893788 337% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -10.74 50.2224549098 -21% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.9 11.3001002004 309% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.76 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.98 8.58950901804 139% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 9.78957915832 301% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.4 10.1190380762 340% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 35.0 10.7795591182 325% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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