A foreign visitor has only one day to spend in your country. Where should this visitor go on that day? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
Nowadays, people prefer to travel somewhere than expensive cars and huge houses and it is a very interesting way to learn about new cultures and explore new places. My country has the same under which are so many tourists visiting and seeing great monuments and the beautiful wilderness.
If a foreign visitor has only one day to spend in my country, I would see the Terelj. Because the tourist does not enough time due to can not go far anywhere. The Terelj which are so beautiful nature, camps, and restaurants with a delicious meal, and available to riding horses of real Mongolia blood's. Also, one advantage is that it is located near Ulaanbaatar and just driving for about one hour. Therefore, Mongolian traditional food which is khorkhog, khuushuur, and buuz it will enjoy for tourists.
After that, they should visit the Mongolian National Historical Museum, and they can know which is elderly Mongolian's life, histories, national clothes, and other interesting things about Mongolia. My country's museums are present about a country's history that is the largest chance.
Eventually, when they go to the airport post or train post, they need to interest the downtown of this city. Recently, My country is established so many new buildings. I believe that tourists would love my country and they will come back again there. In my opinion, If Mongolian people can see history and culture for a foreigner, my country developing rapidly economy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...numents and the beautiful wilderness. If a foreign visitor has only one day to...
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Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... in my country, I would see the Terelj. Because the tourist does not enough time due to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 41.998997996 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1223.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 240.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09583333333 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64172910021 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620833333333 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4984023328 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0769230769 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4615384615 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92307692308 7.06120827912 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0879798450956 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391588127474 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937269964287 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0502683625665 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661390922665 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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