Music and theater have always been integral parts of our culture and a lot of public budget is often spent on them. These days, many people view this spending as a rather unproductive practice and advocate that this money should instead be dedicated to development of community. However, I believe while civil service is important and should be encouraged, spending on arts is also not a waste of money.
There are numerous reasons for why people consider investing money in music and theater is useless. Firstly, we are a developing country and our nation is still struggling to achieve basic necessities like health and education. In such situation, allocating a significant part of budget to entertainment and luxury is a misplaced priority. Furthermore, people should be encouraged to save for more substantial commodities like school and college fee, health insurance and real estate because they ensure a better future for our coming generations.
However, I strongly believe these arguments do not live up to the scrutiny. Firstly, arts like music and theater cannot be reduced to entertainment options only. They not only reflect the culture of a society but also act as vital economic boosters. For instance, music and film industry of India is one of the biggest revenue generators in the country. Moreover, these artistic options produce massive employment opportunities for masses and increase work force which ultimately leads to economic self-sufficiency in a country. Secondly, a successful music and theater industry is capable of attracting foreign investment. This not only brings in foreign exchange into the country and builds a strong financial reserve but also provides large avenues to government for tax collection. In addition to this, sales of theater tickets and music albums are also taxed and in return these monetary profits are used to initiate projects of civil service.
In conclusion, arts like music and theater have always been major public interests but people have concerns that these items drain government money. However, I believe they should not be neglected and instead be seen as an economic opportunity because allocating even a small fraction of government budget can make huge profits. This revenue can be used for projects of public service and a better future can be assured.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25806451613 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82663303568 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529569892473 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 637.2 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7048315337 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.666666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190115271406 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057777510693 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506654574259 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120826945064 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459503163485 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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