The government should control the amount of violence in films and on elevision in order to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this issue?
It is true that the cinema and television programs become a main source of media for increase the violence and antisocial activeties in our society. Personally, I firmly agree that government should censor such programs and films in order to cut down the crime, which is the most concerning of citizens.
First of all, many TV and Internet users are young students and teenagers who are often unware of the different point of view that always exist for any contentious issue. In the face of frequent and often vivid media coverage of such issue, it is very likely that children will have formed ideas about violence at an early age. They often seek to follow and imitate the behavior or words used by the actors in action films that depict violence. Lately, the movie characters become their role models of their life and consequenctly, they will get caught to the enforcement forcers and spoil their future in prison.
At the same time, the information on such programs or movie imposed a negative impacts on the functioning of society as whole. As we all know, in many violent films present a mix reality where the facts are blended by the imagination of the written, an editor to be exact. For example, in some scenes of war movie, the terrorists planned to destroy a whole city using nulear weapons. This could conceivably brings fear and anxiety to audience living in the real world.
In conclusion, I believe that it is the responsiblity of government to exercise a proper level of control over the amount of violence in the media in order to ensure the safety for all.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun TV seems to be countable; consider using: 'many TVs'.
Suggestion: many TVs
...oncerning of citizens. First of all, many TV and Internet users are young students a...
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Line 5, column 408, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
... nulear weapons. This could conceivably brings fear and anxiety to audience living in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, for example, in conclusion, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1312.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77090909091 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54804024515 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610909090909 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 28.6261164927 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 119.272727273 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149571855804 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502755781871 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618044527347 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100725997121 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066912274757 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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