Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today’s world, overpopulation and road congestion is a major problems of almost all developing country, including Vietnam. Some people suggest that we should spend more money on railways than on road to solve this problems, but I strongly opposed this opinion because of it’s possibility.
In fact, there are 4 main factors that form the quality of the rail transportation: the condition of the infrastructure, the merit of the vehicle, the superiority of the service, and the most important thing is the control of private company, however, all of these elements are disappointed and the likelihood to solve these problems in the near future is once time in the blue moon.
First of all, it’s clear that nearly all government of developing country are still struggling with the quality of the infrastructure of the railway transportation. In fact, most of these track are mature and in many aspects, it’s insanely sluggish and dangerous, so it’s cost much time and surely, it’s not the best option for most customers. In addition, the train cannot built in the urban area, for two reason. First and foremost, clearly the train in the city will be very noisy, so it will unexpectedly create noise pollution. The next reason is the capacity for the construction. In order to construct a massive structure as a train route in the city, they need to clear variety of building, which cost an amount of money. And the final reason is if you build a train ways in the city, it will directly compete with traditional bus, which is an poor idea. Moreover, near those gas stations, it’s lack of fundamental service, such as big supermarket or the wait room, so it’s akward for both foreign and domestic travellers. For all of those reason, I think hardly no investors will be ready to risk a lot of money to fix the remaining problems.
The second reason that prevent investors from renewing the railways is the age of vehicles, which is a major obstacles. In the comparison to developed country such as Japan, China or Russia, their’s train was insanely speedy, about 10 times faster than most of train in Vietnam. Indeed, because the train of Vietnam was nearly at the end of its lifetime, it’s very noisy and vibration, which effect hardly to my experience on that journey. On the other side, the trains in Japan are quiet and peaceful in it’s cabin, so the trip will be so relax and comfortable. In dead, to develop such an excellent train as Japan or China, it costs a lot of both time and money, and I believe that not many investors were patient enough to cycle back their funds. For those reasons, the train in Vietnam will be guests picky, and of course, no investors will be interested in this construct anymore because of its price.
The third obstacles that every investor had to thinking about is the quality of the service on the train. It’s cant be disposed that the standard of service on the train has been boosted magically for the past 20 years, but still, it’s still not enough if you compared to the service economy seat or the business class at the same prices. In order to enhance the service on the train, for sure, it will cost such a long time, money and even humans. Clearly, no body will risk such an amount of money for that risky business.
The last obstacle, and the biggest one, is the control of railway business of the government. If the train system was fully operated on the state budget exclusively, there will be no rivalry between the private firm and the government, which will anticipate the thrive of the train industry. In deed, it will be such a waste if we cease the movement of railway industry, especially it’s a billion commerce. The question is, who will dare to compensate millions to get profits after 50, or even 100 years?
In conclusion, the development of the train is still not sturdy enough to convince the investors to join in this billions business. In my opinion, government should spends money on roads more than on railways because of its potentiality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
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Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
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Preposition: 97.0 41.998997996 231% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3357.0 1615.20841683 208% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 702.0 315.596192385 222% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78205128205 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.14735685561 4.20363070211 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63180522276 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 329.0 176.041082164 187% => OK
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syllable_count: 1015.2 506.74238477 200% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
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Preposition: 15.0 4.76152304609 315% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
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Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
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Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
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Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404396531811 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837589236001 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893454303714 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0961703037745 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
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linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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