Governments should support care vs finance for retired people While they should save money when they get older Discuss both views and give opinions

Fewer topics are more important than a country's elderly caring system, and the issue of whether the government should support financially for retired workers will probably always be a topic of controversy. It seems to me that although the retired workforce should be looked after by the government, they need to have their own savings in case of emergency situations.
On the one hand, it is necessary for the government to take care of retired citizens because they lack the capacity to survive by themselves. As a person grows older, their physical and mental traits will also deteriorate. For example, old people are likely to suffer from diseases such as Alzheimer's and high blood pressure, which affect their ability to perform and lead to being disqualified for many jobs. Another reason is that they can not compete with younger generations. Some may argue that the elderly will have an experience advantage compared to the youth. Despite the fact that this is true, employers nowadays are searching for employees who are proactive and can work with the company for a lengthy period of time. Thus, the elderly are less likely to acquire a job in which income can be used to meet their requirement for a healthy lifestyle. Financial support from the government is necessary for them to maintain their minimum needs.
On the other hand, the elderly should save up some budget in case of emergency situations. Economic crisis, or recently, a pandemic like covid 19, is likely to disrupt the support from the government as they utilize that money for other higher priorities. Without an emergency account, elders will probably find themselves in a financial struggle, and this would lead to them becoming financially dependent on external factors.
In conclusion, I agree that the government should assist retirees with money, but each retiree must be aware of their situation and strive to stay financially independent.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10443037975 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70432269528 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575949367089 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8871918466 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.214285714 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244779085968 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830109220496 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574998140887 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15030707023 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461924396483 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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