The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the

Statistics show that there is an increase in percentage of obese people world wide. In general public considers that the Health care system is a fragile sector, any amount of additional load can showup the cracks with in the sector. Over weight people, generally are considered vulnerable to a major sum of health issues. Many think this being a lack of physical activity weather it might be at schools or at workplace.
It is proven with this pandemic situation that the health care system can't bare a rapid surge in patients that needs treatment simultaneously. This is a result of poor infrastructure and lack of medication equipment. Many patients with other illness could not receive treatment as an effect of the pandemic. There are a lot of health issues that are a direct or indirect results of obesity. These include Diabetes, Thyroid, Muscle related issues, and major Heart related issues. Major of these can be prevented to some extent by preventing obesity, which gives a boost to health care system to attend more pressing issues at hand.
That being said there are a number of factors that lead to obesity and a way to prevent it. These days, most of schools are neglecting physical education in regard with academics. There is a possible solution to obesity by having more physical activities, furthermore, studies show higher cognitive ability in students that have regular physical activities. As earlier mentioned, the majority of people think being active at physical sports is a way out from obesity. Although this is true to some extinct, many researchers claim that nutrition plays a more important role, And even newer findings shows the impact of genes on body weight.
Having everything into consideration, It is true that health care system puts a great effort to deal with additional strain due to the rate at which health issues of obese and their number are growing. I agree that physical education can result in fruitful results, yet it being alone is not sufficient to eradicate obesity. There is a need to understand the bigger picture of nutrition and genes too.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: worldwide
... increase in percentage of obese people world wide. In general public considers that the H...
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Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: WORLD_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worldwide'?
Suggestion: worldwide
... increase in percentage of obese people world wide. In general public considers that the H...
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Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...rcentage of obese people world wide. In general public considers that the Health care system i...
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Line 2, column 71, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...c situation that the health care system cant bare a rapid surge in patients that nee...
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Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the schools') or simply say ''most schools''.
Suggestion: most of the schools; most schools
...ty and a way to prevent it. These days, most of schools are neglecting physical education in re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, so, in general, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98575498575 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66694363867 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535612535613 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5815234357 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2222222222 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16666666667 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342144828336 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904821794852 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700799332977 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202343118702 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352264078729 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: worldwide
... increase in percentage of obese people world wide. In general public considers that the H...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: WORLD_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worldwide'?
Suggestion: worldwide
... increase in percentage of obese people world wide. In general public considers that the H...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...rcentage of obese people world wide. In general public considers that the Health care system i...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 71, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...c situation that the health care system cant bare a rapid surge in patients that nee...
^^^^
Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the schools') or simply say ''most schools''.
Suggestion: most of the schools; most schools
...ty and a way to prevent it. These days, most of schools are neglecting physical education in re...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, so, in general, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98575498575 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66694363867 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535612535613 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5815234357 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2222222222 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16666666667 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342144828336 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904821794852 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700799332977 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202343118702 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352264078729 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.