The increase in people s life expectancy means that they have to work older to pay for their retirement One alternative is that people start to work at a younger age Is this alternative a positive or negative development

Without any doubt, society is divided into two groups as per the distinct mindset of different people. Therefore, this has become a debate able issue whether people should set up a journey of work at age of teenage to meet one's life duration.
To commence with the first notion, there are myriad things to be shared in its favor. first of all, younger age is that people can save more money and thus have financial security in later life. This is because at a younger age people have better health and memory to do work to achieve whatever they desire. The second point is, young people, have fewer financial and family obligations than older people and thus they can priorities their careers as a consequence, moving from one country to another place is possible to pursue goal attainment. To exemplify, whenever a person likes to switch from a job in his career as age is the main fact to move up the career ladder.
Moving towards the second argument of this debate the first point, the main advantage from the societal perspective is that a young person is a fitter and productive for companies. For instance, older people cannot climb stairs and feel fatigued while doing work for a longer time. Apart from that, young people who have got a job at an earlier stage can establish their family life as soon as possible. As a result, they can devote more time to their children upbringing which helps to reduce smoking, drinking and juvenile delinquency.
To recapitulate, I would conclude that starting a career at an earlier age is certainly a better alternative to working older as it would be advantageous to both individuals and society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...yriad things to be shared in its favor. first of all, younger age is that people can ...
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Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...y a better alternative to working older as it would be advantageous to both indivi...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, for instance, in fact, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76923076923 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53289763779 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583916083916 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1758883197 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352376329573 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118303939996 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910811530647 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198391826068 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297352207117 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...yriad things to be shared in its favor. first of all, younger age is that people can ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...y a better alternative to working older as it would be advantageous to both indivi...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, for instance, in fact, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76923076923 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53289763779 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583916083916 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1758883197 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352376329573 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118303939996 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910811530647 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198391826068 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297352207117 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.