Internet technology means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
There is a widely-held view among people about whether human beings can comprehend how others live by utilizing the use of internet technology rather than travelling abroad. While there has been a growing body in favor of technological advancement that can act as a stimulus to achieve that idea, I disagree with this view for several reasons.
Firstly, it is undoubtedly true that the proliferation of technological advancement combined with the widespread use of the internet provides people an opportunity to get a wealth of information regarding other oversea countries with just a click of a button on their devices, but that is not always the exact case. For instance, a majority of contents providing travelling reviews are reported to be exaggerated, or even in the worse scenario, containing fake materials. This is due to the fact that many influencers and content creators tend to act as sensational journalists to achieve and maintain high audience ratings, even if this action is against the moral and ethical codes from a societal level. This would lead to many audiences who are swayed by those splendid words immediately believing what they have read without recertifying and ending up being tricked.
Secondly, when it comes to travelling to other countries, tourists have a tendency to gather in the touristy areas ranging from luxurious hotels to touristy attractions. Even though this phenomenon can contribute to stimulating those areas’ socioeconomic progression, those experiences will not reflect the actual daily life of inhabitants. Furthermore, I believe that only when people devote their time to experience by themselves, they will have a chance to acquire myths, rituals, traditional activities and historical heritages from their own point of views, exploring the cultural uniqueness which differs from each person’s background. This helps to broaden their horizons, allowing them to getting a multi-dimensional outlook on life, which will act as a precursor to comprehensive personal development.
In conclusion, it might seem sensible to me that while internet technology can bring some beneficial impacts to some extent, I am strongly of the opinion that using that cannot replace the actual experience of travelling.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 190, Rule ID: ACTUAL_EXPERIENCE[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...nion that using that cannot replace the actual experience of travelling.
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Line 4, column 222, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ce the actual experience of travelling.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4415954416 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12486393889 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626780626781 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.6440018863 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.636363636 106.682146367 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9090909091 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0909090909 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129610767099 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476261237688 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558180923963 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817365644443 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546767190548 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 50.2224549098 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.48 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 9.78957915832 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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