It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
family: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">many people believe that media, pop culture and friends are generally family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">thoughfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> to have the biggest impact on a child’s development. While other people strongly believe that family is the most important factor. personally, I agree with the former opinion for a number of reasons.
family: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Most children live with their family: their parents or grandparents. children are taught and cared for by their families, children family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">will imitatefamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> and learn from their parents' personalities and actions, thereby affecting the formation and development of children's personalities. The surrounding environment and family will directly affect the child's , for example, children living in an unhappy family will have a family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">rebellious personalityfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">, resistance, family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">crime rate in these children is also higherfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">. Therefore, the family is also a major factor in the growth of children.
family: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">However, in my opinion, with the development of science and technology, children are exposed to smart devices and the internet from a young age, they learn and family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">receive everything from the internetfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">, thereby affecting family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">their thinking children's thoughtsfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> and actions. In addition, children family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">are increasingly going to schoolfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">, spending more time with friends than family, they often family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">have the habit of imitating what they are exposed tofamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">. children will imitate each other, learn from each other, also known as family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">crowd psychology family: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">because they do not have much experience, so they will be easily influenced. A simple example is the Tiktok application that is being loved by young people, this application is constantly updated with many new trends and family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">children will imitatefamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> those trends,family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> to integrate withfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> friends, family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">children othersfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> will follow.
family: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> To summarize, both family and external factors play an important role in children's development although my view is that external factors have more influence on children but children family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">need both the above factorsfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> to be able to family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">perfectfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> and develop both family: Arial; color: rgb(255, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">physically and mentallyfamily: Arial; background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> better.
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- It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child s development are media pop culture and friends A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role Discuss both views and give your opinion 11
- It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child s development are media pop culture and friends A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role Discuss both views and give your opinion 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 7396.0 1615.20841683 458% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 752.0 315.596192385 238% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 9.83510638298 5.12529762239 192% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.23666099739 4.20363070211 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 6.5459475401 2.80592935109 233% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.259308510638 0.561755894193 46% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1950.3 506.74238477 385% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.6 1.60771543086 162% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 57.0 20.2975951904 281% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 476.857253522 49.4020404114 965% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 568.923076923 106.682146367 533% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 57.8461538462 20.7667163134 279% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0219752259006 0.244688304435 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0305907764578 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403612056634 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0256524430819 0.151304729494 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244995179143 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 53.8 13.0946893788 411% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -70.98 50.2224549098 -141% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 25.3 7.44779559118 340% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 37.3 11.3001002004 330% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 40.68 12.4159519038 328% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.8 10.1190380762 245% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 25.0 10.7795591182 232% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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