It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, people tend to take risks both in there career lives and their personal lives. This case will lead to the advantages and the disadvantages. This essay is going to discuss both side of the view.
Firstly, in there professional lives, they may hard to find the better opportunities in their job if they don't take risks. If they can calculate the risks that they will have to face with and can know how to solve this. It will be a best choice for them to take risks. For example, the Michellin company was the car shops in the first time they celebrated it. After that, a Michellin star was opened, they take a best opportunity to create it. This has some explainations that they can introduce the visitors to take the best food serving when they need to wait for their cars. While take risks can bring you some disadvantages if you don't know how to solve the problem if your work don't work properly. For instance, the Playstation Portable game console was the best portable game device when Sony first introduced in 2006. After that, the Playstation Vita was introduced in 2013, but with the same design, so it's became old-fashioned. This have a loss of money for the Sony company because the products they sell was too small.
Secondly, there personal lives also changes a lot if you can take risks. You can take a chance to have a lucky life if you can deal with the problem. For example, if you can make friend with the truly friend, you could pass your hard lives because your friend can help you. But it can be a disadvantage if you make with the untruly friend.
In conclusion, this case have the pros and cons. It will be successful if you can solve all the problems that you can deal with it. This also be a disadvantages if you don't think carefully about your choices. I belived that the advantage oppotunity when you take risks is outweight the disadvatages
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52647058824 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.471587683 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455882352941 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.5857457481 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.2857142857 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1904761905 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268412570774 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918058199352 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785613379972 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183636685215 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300400425194 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 13.0946893788 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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