It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, people argue that taking risks is an important part of our lives, not only in career development but also in daily life. I personally believe that this could have more benefits than drawbacks.
In the level of work, people would be able to get better opportunities when they decide to accept some risks in their career path. For example, Elon Musk is a person who uses all his money after selling a company to invest in a high-risk field which is the space industry. It is a risky decision but he now is the richest person in the world. Furthermore, taking risks also helps us to develop skills that a normal and stable job cannot. In other words, accepting some pressures and uncertain things can inspire everyone to find their most suitable careers and then achieve the highest level in their profession.
About personal aspects, taking risks plays a crucial role in individual development. Choosing a risky life may be more interesting and meaningful than a normal life because it challenges us to overcome the limit. In the developed world, it is hard for everyone to live in comfortable zones because there are always challenges and difficulties in the future, so accepting some risks to adapt will certainly be beneficial. For example, artificial intelligence are threatening some jobs like writing, creating content, if a person accept changes and learn more skills relating to program, data analysis, they will have more opportunities to be promoted in their careers.
In conclusion, it seems to me that it is important for people to take risks both in their careers and their personal lives and I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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...nities to be promoted in their careers. In conclusion, it seems to me that it is...
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... advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1397.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98928571429 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77525279231 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578571428571 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3829847007 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.416666667 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37998260489 0.244688304435 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13728086592 0.084324248473 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143902116283 0.0667982634062 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282927278505 0.151304729494 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175690925581 0.056905535591 309% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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