It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The issue about taking risks increase some debate. Some people believe that taking risks has significant effect to people both in their professional lives and personal lives. From my perspective, my view is that suffering risks with more advantages than disadvantages.
One reason is that it is easier for people to get success professional field if they take risks. This is because people meet a lot of difficult problems in their academic or work process allow them to learn how to overcome these problem or solve some emergency situation, which improves their ability of solving problems. As a result, this helps them become a professor faster or easier.
The other reason is that people taking risks can improve their confidence. More specifically, since taking dangers may stimulate people talent, they will have more motivations or ideas, therefore getting high level of self-efficacy if they solve the problem successfully once. For example, if people who hurt his leg, he would follow the doctor advice and keep training which might meet some challenge in his sure process. Thus, once he became health, he would get some positive emotion that encourage him to overcome other problems in his life.
However, it is true that people facing risks has some disadvantages. For example, some people may be suffered from psychological problems, such as anxiety or depression. This is because some people in a high stress level once they meet risks which they can not adapt in this situation. As a result, this leading to negative feeling happens and gets psychological disorder. While this disadvantages can be solved. When people suffer in challenge, they can seek for help, such as teachers, parents, friends or psychologists and so on. They can give some suggestions or support that encourage people to solve the problem.
In conclusion, people facing risks may lead them get some emotion problems, while get success in their professional field and improve confidence have more advantages than disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this problem' or 'these problems'?
Suggestion: this problem; these problems
...ess allow them to learn how to overcome these problem or solve some emergency situation, whic...
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Line 7, column 374, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...appens and gets psychological disorder. While this disadvantages can be solved. When ...
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Line 7, column 380, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... and gets psychological disorder. While this disadvantages can be solved. When peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1700.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24691358025 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7840806408 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515432098765 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4707795036 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4444444444 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235352768899 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092075863209 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874455247389 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156471867417 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755860628484 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.