It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
In the recent days, there is a general consensus that the nonconformity between technology and traditional cultures can lead to the disappearance of our identity. In my opinion, I totally disagree with this point of view as technology is one of the factors which enriches cultures, moreover it is the fault of humans to overuse technology in the wrong way.
The first culprit why I believe that the advancement in technology do not result in the lost of cultures is that it is one of the most effective elements which propagates cultures to everyone. As with the assistance of technology, individuals could search and find information about any cultures in a convenient way, plus there are many advertisements and competitions in the Internet which enable cultures to become widespread among the society. For example, Do Son Buffalo Fighting Festival is a famous cultural event in Vietnam, but is is not popular with the teenager, however in Facebook, there are plenty of posts about this festival when it happens which attract interest of the young.
The second reason is that it is not the responsibility of technology, but it is the fault of citizens to use it in a wrong way and result in the lost of culture. This is because some people always propaganda the negative information about cultures. For instance, they just emphasis on the obsolete cultures and detrimental aspects of them in a perspective slant, but it leads to the misunderstanding about our identity, hence, citizens begin to lose sight in many cultures.
In conclusion, I totally disagree with the notion that technology leading to the disappearance of cultures, this is because it is a tool which help the culture become widespread, furthermore it is the humans who have to take responsibility for this matter.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'consensus'.
Suggestion: consensus
In the recent days, there is a general consensus that the nonconformity between technolo...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a convenient way" with adverb for "convenient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...and find information about any cultures in a convenient way, plus there are many advertisements and...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...a famous cultural event in Vietnam, but is is not popular with the teenager, however ...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a wrong way" with adverb for "wrong"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...t it is the fault of citizens to use it in a wrong way and result in the lost of culture. This...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, however, moreover, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01683501684 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07646471261 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494949494949 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.2099276308 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.555555556 106.682146367 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 20.7667163134 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1111111111 7.06120827912 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29354857128 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119581962052 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703167256 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182372667098 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805278517036 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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