It is more important for the government to spend money on promoting the healthy lifestyle to prevent the illness rather than on the treatment for people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree
It is believed that spreading the healthy living styles should be financially prioritized by government, instead of treating those people who are already diagnosed with certain disease. In my perspective, I partly agree with the given statement as both objectives are essential to society and necessitate the need for equal investment from governments
On the one hand, allocating resources to support the promotion of a healthy lifestyle is vital since prevention is better than cure and noone can claim that everyone has full consciousness about this topic. Specifically, although living healthily can minimize the risk of severe medical problems, there are still many residents who are misinformed about how to engage in such a lifestyle. Consequently, it is extremely important for governments to run campaigns to inform people about healthy living styles such as taking nutritious diets or exercising regularly
On the other hand, treating people with medical issues is also an eually essential obligations of governments as illness are unavoidable. Despite how much a person is into living healthily, health problems are an inseparable part of human life. At some point in time, a person is inevitably ill, raising the need for external finance support. As a result, as some diseases are unavoidable and throughout a life time, people contribute to their country to a certain extent, they deserve financial support from government to cure their illness
In a conclusion, although there are controversial opinions on determining whether investing in spreading healthy lifestyle or treating already-ill individuals is more important, I endorse that both objectives deserve equal financial attention from government . While healthy living styles campaign can help citizens improve their health, treating illness for people is a mandatory responsibility of government
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, still, while, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64310954064 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08303352482 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586572438163 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.2975951904 172% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 125.462083416 49.4020404114 254% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 199.625 106.682146367 187% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.375 20.7667163134 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286996785997 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116102824037 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684056704888 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168439247567 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03676255254 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.8 13.0946893788 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.03 50.2224549098 38% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 11.3001002004 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.1190380762 158% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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